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Patreon - Text errors.
« on: December 18, 2015, 01:30:02 AM »
There are a few of errors in the text on the main Pateon Page.  I am a native english speaker from the UK and have also written for technology magazines for about 10 years (main job software developer).  So if you would like, please feel free to use the text below :

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We are creating exceptionally high quality erotic VR simulation. Funding would allow us to create more 3D models; hairs, character, clothing and we would have a possibility to hire more people for this project. We also need much better hardware and software to reach our goal. Why is our simulation different from others? We are not creating a sex game. Instead, our goal is to give user high quality erotic experience. Our soundworld is already amazing, and we really would like to have the same level with 3D graphics. Check our website www.citor3.com

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We are creating an exceptionally high quality erotic VR simulation. Funding would allow us to create more 3D models; hair styles, characters and clothing.  We would also have the possibility to hire more people for this project. We also need much better hardware and software to reach our goal.

Why is our simulation different from others? Because we are not creating a sex game. Instead, our goal is to give the user a high quality erotic experience. Our sound is already amazing (positional, high quality voice captures, ASMR, hypnosis,binaural beats, mood music), and we really would like to have the same level with the 3D graphics. Check our website www.citor3.com


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Re: Patreon - Text errors.
« Reply #1 on: December 19, 2015, 01:51:24 PM »
Thanks for your help! Text fixed.